tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6697849005821839302.post8423728647370971170..comments2023-06-03T09:33:57.992+01:00Comments on Ernesta Baniulyte: OGRErnesta Baniulytehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03717416346981293821noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6697849005821839302.post-65083918466724634322012-03-21T10:57:32.498+00:002012-03-21T10:57:32.498+00:00OGR 21/03/2012
Morning Ernesta,
Yes - your story...OGR 21/03/2012<br /><br />Morning Ernesta,<br /><br />Yes - your story is fine - and some of those hole-punch thumbnails are nicely expressive. One of your more technical challenges is to ensure that your voice track is suitably well-performed and well-recorded, because it's got a big part to play and needs to be good. In that last scene, of the ruined office, I think it would be nice if you added some additional animation for emphasis - for example, as we're watching, some paper falls off the edge of a desk and throws up a little cloud of paper dots or similar - just a little bit of activity to absolutely seal the deal. You're storyboard suggests you're already thinking about varying sorts of shots - from establishing shots to close-ups of the hole-punch - and this is good; you need to 'direct with a pencil' and make sure you're choosing a nice range of shots to convey your story effectively.<br /><br />In regard to your written assignment - I really, REALLY want you to work with Tracey Ashmore to improve your structure/written English etc. This aspect of your degree studies is holding you back a bit - and we don't want that - so please, get help, and ensure too that you complete your 'animation profiles' etc - because you do indeed need the practice - and only practice makes perfect, after all! The choice of subject for your assignment is a good one - as Władysław Starewicz is often overlooked in terms of stop-motion, so it will be interesting to see you address this imbalance by proving his influence etc. Make it a good one, Ernesta!tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com