are you having a title, Ernesta? If so, you've got those shots at the beginning and the swing light that could be used to integrate some text nicely - as if the text itself is being revealed by the lightbulb too? I'd still like to see you cut some single frames of distressed typed text into the mix - particularly the 'mad' flurry of shots at the end - key vocabulary/images from the story itself - not too much, but something to link your work back to the original text? Just a thought and maybe worth a try...
Hey Phil, I will have title and I am working on it just now. And I will put some text in the animation, I still feel like I need to add some bits in it, so I am giving myself couple more days of experimenting
just watched again - and I don't think the impact sound of the legs is quite right - it's almost too nice a sound. Why not simply make the impact sound of the legs the same sound as the keys hitting? I think that would make sense, and it's a spikier sound - more suitable too?
Also - at the crescendo of the quick-cutting scene, I think you actually need to dial up the volume so that it's increasingly uncomfortable for the viewer and suffocating - at the moment, the volume stays standardised throughout, which has the effect of keeping the viewer safe and comfortable - I think the soundscape needs to get more 'difficult' and more dominant as it builds, so that when the silence comes back in at the end, it feels like more of a release/shock.
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are you having a title, Ernesta? If so, you've got those shots at the beginning and the swing light that could be used to integrate some text nicely - as if the text itself is being revealed by the lightbulb too? I'd still like to see you cut some single frames of distressed typed text into the mix - particularly the 'mad' flurry of shots at the end - key vocabulary/images from the story itself - not too much, but something to link your work back to the original text? Just a thought and maybe worth a try...
Hey Phil, I will have title and I am working on it just now. And I will put some text in the animation, I still feel like I need to add some bits in it, so I am giving myself couple more days of experimenting
Argggh! That is horrific! (In a good way!)....'shivers'...
Thank you! For the past 12 weeks I take 'horrible' as a compliment (:
Yes - one of the few projects where horrific, horrible and ghastly are perfectly correct compliments! :)
just watched again - and I don't think the impact sound of the legs is quite right - it's almost too nice a sound. Why not simply make the impact sound of the legs the same sound as the keys hitting? I think that would make sense, and it's a spikier sound - more suitable too?
Also - at the crescendo of the quick-cutting scene, I think you actually need to dial up the volume so that it's increasingly uncomfortable for the viewer and suffocating - at the moment, the volume stays standardised throughout, which has the effect of keeping the viewer safe and comfortable - I think the soundscape needs to get more 'difficult' and more dominant as it builds, so that when the silence comes back in at the end, it feels like more of a release/shock.
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